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Title: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: TBizzle on 21 June, 2007, 08:10:14 pm
Prologe

Bizzle sat in the middle of the room, fastened in his special jacket, staring at the creature in the corner. "It's not real," he lied to himself as the creature stared back. The room was dark, and all Bizzle could see was the faint outline of something that wasn't supposed to be there. Bizzle dared not move for fear of how the thing might respond. All he could do was remain motionless and hope that sleep would somehow find it's grip on him, but that would never happen. It seemed as though for every second the creature looked into his eyes, a part of his soul was lost.

Every night, soon after lights out, the creature would be there, driving Bizzle further and further past the brink of insanity. The worst nights were those when the moon shone through the barred window of the padded room. Bizzle could see the twisted, evil form of the horrible creature for a split second before he would close his eyes. He could feel the thing's stare burning through his eyelids when he shut them, but to witness the creature for more than a second would be a far worse fate.


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: TBizzle on 21 June, 2007, 08:10:47 pm
Chapter 1

One day, when Bizzle awoke from the sleep that he rarely got, Something was very different. He felt like he could move again. He felt like he had freedom. He opened his eyes, but it was still dark. As he sat up, the moon's cage of clouds was opened. With the room illuminated, Bizzle could see why he felt so strange. His jacket was gone. His mind was filled with a sudden rush of disbelief. How long had he been restrained by that plain, white torture? He noticed that his arms and chest had been deprived of sunlight for so long that they were just as white as the jacket he had worn. But that didn't matter. All that mattered was that the painful restraint was gone. But His short-lived happiness was soon to be crushed.

He was too busy revelling in his newfound freedom to notice that the creature wasn't there. He stood up suddenly. Where did it go? Where Did It Go?! He spun around in place and jolted his head in all directions looking for the beast. Eventually, he noticed something else different. Something different about the door. He rushed to it and examined it. It was cracked open. As he opened the door, he took one last look back at what had been his home for who knows how many years. No. Not his home. His nightmare.


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: TBizzle on 21 June, 2007, 08:11:14 pm
Chapter 2

Bizzle was in an old, filthy hallway. There were fluorescent lights along the ceiling, some broken, some even hanging down. He spotted one laying on the ground. Parts of the wall were different a different color than the rest. He saw a rat scurry along the floor. There were open doors all along the hallway, identical to the one that he was forced to examine all those years. He walked down the hall, looking into each of the rooms. Each one was the same as the last. Padded. White. There was even a barred window in every room. Then he noticed something odd. How could he see if the lights were out?

As soon as that thought crossed his mind, Bizzle felt a sudden burst of pain in his head. It wasn't just a headache. This was a sharp pain. A pain so sharp it felt as if someone had stabbed him straight through the skull. He couldn't handle it. His knees buckled and he fell to the ground. It wouldn't stop. The pain just kept going, getting more and more intense. He could hear ringing. At first it was the ringing of a watch. Then the ringing of an alarm clock. Eventually, it was as if all the church bells in the world decided to go and tell Bizzle how much they hated him. After a while, the noise started dying down. Then he could hear something else. He couldn't make it out at first, but after the ringing was almost completely gone, he knew. It was laughter.


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Killer_Spatula on 21 June, 2007, 08:13:05 pm
Will more users be in, or just you?


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: TBizzle on 21 June, 2007, 08:14:09 pm
There will be more. The first user other than me will be in the next chapter.


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Obsidius on 21 June, 2007, 11:47:10 pm
W00t for more users!


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Gaffit on 23 June, 2007, 11:21:00 am
*starts slow applause that gets progressively faster*


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: TBizzle on 24 June, 2007, 04:16:21 pm
Chapter 3

Bizzle looked up at the source of the laughter, his headache almost completely gone. He was confused and angry. He wanted to know what just happened, and why this psycho in a bloody surgeon's outfit was laughing at him.
"Who the hell are you," Bizzle said, his headache now only a memory.
"Ooh, someone sure is touchy. You should be nicer to me, considering I just saved you from a world of pain. I almost didn't help you at first. I was quite enjoying the pitiful look on your face. HA hahahaha..."
"What are you talking about?! Are you ****ing insane?!"
"I saw you writhing on the ground, holding your impatient little head, and then I remembered that I have the cure for everything," The crazed doctor's voice was muffled by the pointless mask he wore over his mouth. "I took out one of my trusty syringes and plunged it into your arm! It always works!"

"What?! You're a psychopath!!" Bizzle examined the needle sticking oout of his arm, his eyes growing heavy.
"Don't call me a psychopath! That's quite rude! Call me HouseCallDoc."
"I don't have to call you anything if I don't ever see your crazy ass again..."
"Oh, you won't have to worry about seeing my "crazy ass" again. I have other matters to attend to. When you wake up, I wont be here to bother you anymore. Ba-bye!" The doctor walked off down the hallway.
"Wait! What do you mean, "wake up?" Bizzle stumbled to his feet to go after the doctor, but he couldn't walk more than 5 steps. He soon fell back to the ground, and blackness swept over him.


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Gaffit on 24 June, 2007, 04:28:52 pm
Interesting.


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Masterman on 26 June, 2007, 03:33:27 pm
cool... ;D


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: 5BASS on 26 June, 2007, 08:43:51 pm
This is the best User story I've ever read from anyone on the SSBBSB.


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Killer_Spatula on 27 June, 2007, 05:20:37 pm
This is the best User story I've ever read from anyone on the SSBBSB.
*storms off in a rage*


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: 5BASS on 27 June, 2007, 05:48:43 pm
This is the best User story I've ever read from anyone on the SSBBSB.
*storms off in a rage*
But I'm sure once I read your Monty python one, it'll be the best!  ^_^


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Killer_Spatula on 28 June, 2007, 12:11:30 pm
Yay.


Right, Bizz, we're waiting!


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: TBizzle on 28 June, 2007, 03:54:34 pm
I have to think of who and where to put my next chapter...


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Killer_Spatula on 28 June, 2007, 04:40:46 pm
MEEEEEE!!!


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Adol the Red on 29 June, 2007, 11:25:46 am
You can put in the chapter after this one since Killer_Spatula ashed first


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Adol the Red on 29 June, 2007, 11:27:34 am
Asked.
>_>
<_<
my spelling sucks today....


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: TBizzle on 29 June, 2007, 05:08:43 pm
Chapter 4

Bizzle opened his eyes and had no idea where he was. He sprung to his feet and looked around. After a few seconds of examination, he remembered that he was free of the padded room, and that he had been injected with who-knows-what by some insane doctor.
I shouldn't be calling him insane...
Bizzle leaned against a wall, and was soon lost in thought.
I don't even remember why I'm in this place... I don't feel crazy...
Bizzle's thoughts were scattered when he heard a sound. When he heard footsteps.

Bizzle was near the end of the hall, staring at the padded room(I don't feel crazy...) from which the footsteps were coming from.
No...this isn't happening...
Bizzle watched as the creature crawled out of what had been his home(No. Not my home. My nightmare.) for all those years. It sat down in the middle of the hallway and stared at Bizzle. It was a miracle that Bizzle managed to pull his eyes away and dash for the door at the end of the hallway. The creature had stood up, and it started to change. Bizzle was almost to the door. The thing's legs extended and unfolded. Bizzle was at the door. The thing's whole body extended and unfolded, as if it had been curled up. Bizzle was on the other side of the door. When Bizzle turned around, he collapsed not only from the sheer fright of what had just happened, but also out of shock from what he saw in front of him.
"Am I free??"


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Gaffit on 29 June, 2007, 08:00:01 pm
Plot Development!


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Killer_Spatula on 29 June, 2007, 09:02:35 pm
Then the creature turned out to be Spat.
 ;D
Or...not.


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: TBizzle on 29 June, 2007, 10:05:24 pm
It's gonna be hard to name everybody in the story...

I think I might just not name them. People could probably figure out who they are anyway...


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Killer_Spatula on 29 June, 2007, 10:55:47 pm
It's gonna be hard to name everybody in the story...

I think I might just not name them. People could probably figure out who they are anyway...
Pweaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaase put me in?


I put you in mine!


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Gaffit on 30 June, 2007, 12:17:56 am
I can be evil, I'm an awsome evil guy...
 
Really...

;~;


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Killer_Spatula on 30 June, 2007, 08:35:04 am
Bizz! I'll make you a Knight who says Ni if you put me in!  ;D


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: 5BASS on 30 June, 2007, 02:48:35 pm
*wishes to be in the story eventually*


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: TBizzle on 30 June, 2007, 02:49:31 pm
You're gonna be in, Spatula.


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Killer_Spatula on 30 June, 2007, 07:21:14 pm
Yay!
*makes you a Knight who says Ni*


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Masterman on 30 June, 2007, 08:51:28 pm
*wants to be in story* *puts head down*


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Zigzagoon on 30 June, 2007, 09:08:47 pm
I'm confused...


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: sasori1122 on 01 July, 2007, 04:18:01 pm
Gaffit also makes a good giant...


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: GAY FOR BRIDGET(HousecallDoc) on 03 July, 2007, 09:29:17 pm
OMG i'm evil... Awesome!


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: the poncho on 04 July, 2007, 08:39:41 am
I'm not in this?? Hm... Well, when I do get in, which I know I will be, I'll be the guy who you think is a total bastard but turns out to help you in the end.

You know, the guy whos surrounded by women at the Mexican Bar? Yeah. That guy.


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Killer_Spatula on 20 July, 2007, 09:00:26 pm
*Waits*


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: TBizzle on 21 July, 2007, 12:02:05 am
Yeah...

I don't think I'm gonna keep writing this...

I have a short attention span...


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Killer_Spatula on 21 July, 2007, 03:33:22 pm
Kay.


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: TBizzle on 08 August, 2007, 12:06:24 am
I'm confused...

Eh?


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Killer_Spatula on 08 August, 2007, 09:08:55 am
Fishbones.


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Gaffit on 13 August, 2007, 12:30:26 am
Yeah...

I don't think I'm gonna keep writing this...

I have a short attention span...

;~;


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Killer_Spatula on 03 October, 2007, 07:46:05 pm
I'm unstickying this, it's never updated, so no need.


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: TBizzle on 03 October, 2007, 07:47:48 pm
I didn't know it still existed...


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: TBizzle on 30 November, 2008, 06:08:09 pm
I REMEMBER THIS OLO


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Ahriman on 14 April, 2010, 06:54:55 pm
i need closure on this most excellent work of art


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Marie Rose on 14 April, 2010, 07:13:30 pm
Didn't know about this. Man, this must have been so long ago, cause Bizzle almost always posts in caps now...


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: TBizzle on 14 April, 2010, 07:16:03 pm
CHAPTER 5

BIZZLE CONTINUES HIS POORLY WRITTEN, ANGSTY ADVENTURE FOR A WHILE AND THEN THERE'S A PLOT TWIST AND HE DIES.

FIN


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Marie Rose on 14 April, 2010, 07:19:51 pm
WHAT A TWIST! MIND = BLOWN


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Ahriman on 14 April, 2010, 09:18:07 pm
10/10


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Spring-Loaded on 14 April, 2010, 11:32:57 pm
would read again


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Spring-Loaded on 30 July, 2011, 07:05:45 pm
A bot was looking at this


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Marie Rose on 30 July, 2011, 07:32:00 pm
Many of them do...


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: TBizzle on 30 July, 2011, 07:32:32 pm
DAMMIT


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Spring-Loaded on 30 July, 2011, 07:42:55 pm
did read again


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: Ahriman on 30 July, 2011, 08:06:46 pm
<3


Title: Re: My User Story: Insanity
Post by: TBizzle on 30 July, 2011, 08:08:18 pm
Bizzle watched as the creature crawled out of what had been his home(No. Not my home. My nightmare.)

SH(http://)IT THIS IS DEEP