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Title: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Chapter 7 is UP!)
Post by: zeldafan42 on 20 February, 2009, 01:26:07 am
Alright guys! I've undertaken an epic task here. I'm making my own One Piece fanfic about my very own One Piece fan crew, the Seagull Pirates. Partially, this thread is to just discuss my story in general. But this thread will also be used for a few other things.

For starters, I'll be posting profiles of the crew members as they show up in the story. It'll mostly just be Tektek avvies of the characters with a little bit of information, but I'll update the profiles as the story progresses. But, I'm going to put the profiles in a separate post, so hold on a second while I get that post set up.

Also, I'm thinking about doing an SBS corner every 5 chapters, like Oda does in the One Piece volumes. So if you have any questions about the series, ask away, and I'll answer the ones I like to the best of my ability.

So, I guess I'll just end this post with a link to my Fanfiction.net profile where the story is located. Please check it out!
http://www.fanfiction.net/~viewtifularyll


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 3 Chapters Up!)
Post by: zeldafan42 on 20 February, 2009, 01:26:29 am
(http://i191.photobucket.com/albums/z299/Gaffit/SeagullPirates.png)
Image made by Gaffit, stolen by ZeldaFan.
Seagull Pirates Crew Profiles

(http://public4.tektek.org/img/av/0902/d19/2218/52d1966.png) (http://tektek.org/avatar/24436962)
Name: Aryll Ritter
Age: 18
Gender: Female
Race: Human
Height: 6'0"

Position: Captain
Weapon: Longsword
Devil Fruit: Beam Beam Fruit

(http://public2.tektek.org/img/av/0811/d30/1553/f64954.png) (http://tektek.org/avatar/21630692)
Name: "Gentleman Brawler" Diego Edgewright
Age: 24
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Height: 6'0"

Position: First Mate, Navigator
Combat Style: Martial Arts
Devil Fruit: None.

(http://public2.tektek.org/img/av/0811/d30/1638/126144.png) (http://tektek.org/avatar/21632839)
Name: Milo Ritter
Age: 18
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Height: 5'11"

Position: Second Mate, Sniper
Weapon: Bow & Arrows, other ranged weapons.
Devil Fruit: None.

(http://public2.tektek.org/img/av/0811/d30/1706/fcdb30.png) (http://tektek.org/avatar/21634263)
Name: Roark
Age: 21
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Height: 6'3"

Position: Shipwright
Combat Style: Untrained, devil-fruit enhanced hand-to-hand combat
Devil Fruit: Drill Drill Fruit.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 3 Chapters Up!)
Post by: Hawk_v3 on 20 February, 2009, 04:14:52 am
It reads well. Do I smell an influence of tengen toppa gurren lagann?


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 3 Chapters Up!)
Post by: zeldafan42 on 20 February, 2009, 09:10:19 am
Yup, but only Roark's story arc is going to have a lot of TTGL references. After that, I'm going to tone it down a little bit.

I tend to pull inspiration from as many sources as I can for each crew member to try to make them unique.
When I thought of a Drill Drill Fruit, I knew I had to use that character as a fond reference to TTGL.

Wait until you see all the references and jokes in the next big story arc. >_> I'll give you a clue. I have a running gag with the names of all the crew members that I don't want to reveal quite yet, but the next character is one of the only two characters whose name origin was really used to plan their character.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 3 Chapters Up!)
Post by: Hawk_v3 on 20 February, 2009, 09:11:58 am
*nods* This'll be interesting to read.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 3 Chapters Up!)
Post by: I_like_Nonon on 20 February, 2009, 12:09:30 pm
Will read later, got home from school a an hour ago, tired, sentece fragments and stuff


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 3 Chapters Up!)
Post by: zeldafan42 on 22 February, 2009, 11:06:58 am
Well guys....I have Chapter 4 typed up...but Fanfiction.net is being stupid and not letting me post it. *sigh* Some stupid error.

The worse part is, I may not be able to get onto the computer for two weeks after today, so I would really like to get it up before I vanish again.

So keep an eye on my Fanfiction.net profile, because I may be able to post it, but then be unable to let you guys know here.

And also, if it's not too much trouble, could you please review my story on Fanfiction.net. Even if it's only because I asked you guys, the sight of reviews makes me really happy, and just might attract readers to my story.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 3 Chapters Up!)
Post by: Marie Rose on 22 February, 2009, 05:15:52 pm
When I eventually start reading One Piece sometime within the next few weeks, I'll look it up. Besides, I got that other story of yours on my favorites anyway.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 3 Chapters Up!)
Post by: Gaffit on 22 February, 2009, 06:53:56 pm
Another good site for this stuff is Fictionpress.com. I have some old stuff on there, but the community has a lot of professional writers if you want people to take a serious look at your work.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 3 Chapters Up!)
Post by: Gargravarr on 02 March, 2009, 12:45:24 pm
Roark... A name taken from Diamond/Pearl, perchance?

And his personality wouldn't happen to be based on Kamina's would it?


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 3 Chapters Up!)
Post by: zeldafan42 on 03 April, 2009, 07:10:56 am
Roark... A name taken from Diamond/Pearl, perchance?

And his personality wouldn't happen to be based on Kamina's would it?

<_<
I shall not reveal the secrets of how I named my characters!
*cough* Everymember of the Seagull Crew is named after a video game character...mostly Nintendo characters, but at least two are named after Capcom characters who have appeared on Nintendo consoles.*cough*

Roark is about 40% Kamina, 40% older Simon, 15% original, and maybe 5% Franky.
At least that's the direction I'm trying to take him in.


ALSO: CHAPTER 4 IS UP!


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 4 Chapters Up!)
Post by: Hawk_v3 on 03 April, 2009, 08:36:40 am
*Goes to read*

Oh, I tried to post a review about five times, but the system keeps buggering up.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 4 Chapters Up!)
Post by: zeldafan42 on 03 April, 2009, 08:40:23 am
CURSE YOU FANFICTION.NET! I MUST HAVE REVIEWS! HOW DARE YOU TRY AND PREVENT MY GOOD FRIEND HAWK FROM REVIEWING!?

Another good site for this stuff is Fictionpress.com. I have some old stuff on there, but the community has a lot of professional writers if you want people to take a serious look at your work.

*nods head* I've seen that site before...
I figure that if I get an itch to publish my original stuff online, I'll go there....but for my fanfics, I more than happy to feed them to the drooling masses of Fanfiction, and just rely on my friends for some serious opinions.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 4 Chapters Up!)
Post by: Hawk_v3 on 03 April, 2009, 08:43:44 am
Whelp, one got through just now, so you should see it at some point soon.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 4 Chapters Up!)
Post by: zeldafan42 on 03 April, 2009, 08:48:20 am
Yay! *does a happy dance* I love me some reviews.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 4 Chapters Up!)
Post by: Ƨɒlƚy on 03 April, 2009, 02:55:58 pm
Aryll...damn, I know what she's from, but I can't remember it now. However, the beam beam fruit makes her sound suspiciously similar to Kizaru.

Edgewright. Edgey. 'Nuff said.

The other two I have nothing that hasn't been said.

Ah! Now I remember, it's the name of Link's sis from WW. Come to think of it, Milo sounds suspiciously similar to Mido, the boss Kokiri from OoT.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 4 Chapters Up!)
Post by: zeldafan42 on 04 April, 2009, 07:42:17 am
*claps* Yay! You are correct. Milo is supposed to be named after Mido. However, at the time I was naming him, I couldn't remember if the boss Kokiri's name was Milo or Mido, and I didn't have access to OoT or anything else that could have told me his name...so I started calling my character Milo, and even when I learned the truth, the name had already kind of stuck, so I just rolled with it.

And Aryll's Beam Beam Fruit is different. First of all, it's a Paramecia type, not a Logia. Second, it fires beams of kinetic force....think something like Cyclop's eye beam from X-Men.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 4 Chapters Up!)
Post by: Gargravarr on 04 April, 2009, 09:22:30 am
Aryll...damn, I know what she's from, but I can't remember it now. However, the beam beam fruit makes her sound suspiciously similar to Kizaru.

Edgewright. Edgey. 'Nuff said.

The other two I have nothing that hasn't been said.

Ah! Now I remember, it's the name of Link's sis from WW. Come to think of it, Milo sounds suspiciously similar to Mido, the boss Kokiri from OoT.

Aryll is Link's little sister in Wind Waker.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 4 Chapters Up!)
Post by: I_like_Nonon on 04 April, 2009, 03:48:09 pm
I'll need to read up on stuff. I'm a chapter behind I think.

I like this though, 'tis pretty good.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 4 Chapters Up!)
Post by: Ƨɒlƚy on 05 April, 2009, 12:31:49 pm
Aryll...damn, I know what she's from, but I can't remember it now. However, the beam beam fruit makes her sound suspiciously similar to Kizaru.

Edgewright. Edgey. 'Nuff said.

The other two I have nothing that hasn't been said.

Ah! Now I remember, it's the name of Link's sis from WW. Come to think of it, Milo sounds suspiciously similar to Mido, the boss Kokiri from OoT.

Aryll is Link's little sister in Wind Waker.
Maybe you should have read my whole post before you made yourself look like an idiot.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 4 Chapters Up!)
Post by: Gargravarr on 05 April, 2009, 12:39:39 pm
Ah...

My bad. There's no need to call me a complete idiot, though. It was a simple mistake.

And when showing me your post again, maybe you should've bolded the bit where you said you remembered, instead of the bit I was trying to answer.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 4 Chapters Up!)
Post by: Ƨɒlƚy on 05 April, 2009, 06:38:15 pm
Ah...

My bad. There's no need to call me a complete idiot, though. It was a simple mistake.

And when showing me your post again, maybe you should've bolded the bit where you said you remembered, instead of the bit I was trying to answer.
Again, you misinterpret my post. I'm not calling you an idiot, I'm saying that you made yourself look rather foolish.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 4 Chapters Up!)
Post by: zeldafan42 on 06 April, 2009, 12:01:29 pm
No guys! Please don't fight! I'm sure that we can all agree, the only person in this topic that's an idiot is ILS.

>_> Not that I really think that...I just know ILS will agree to being our official scapegoat idiot.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 4 Chapters Up!)
Post by: I_like_Nonon on 06 April, 2009, 12:20:12 pm
'tis true, I am quite dumb.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 4 Chapters Up!)
Post by: Marie Rose on 06 April, 2009, 02:39:55 pm
And now you know!


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 4 Chapters Up!)
Post by: Hawk_v3 on 06 April, 2009, 02:48:03 pm
And now you know!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zgjtewM_c9w


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 4 Chapters Up!)
Post by: zeldafan42 on 23 May, 2009, 08:25:18 pm
*is getting ready to write the next chapter*


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Already 4 Chapters Up!)
Post by: zeldafan42 on 28 May, 2009, 01:12:29 am
CHAPTER 5 IS UP!

BE WARNED, IT'S NOT AS GOOD AS SOME OF THE OTHER CHAPTERS, ALTHOUGH I'M STARTING TO GET ARYLL REALLY DOWN PAT.

AND I'M TALKING LIKE THIS BECAUSE I'M TIRED-ISH!


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Chapter 5 is UP!)
Post by: Arashi_Uzumaki on 30 May, 2009, 12:02:40 pm
I like it.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Chapter 5 is UP!)
Post by: Marie Rose on 30 May, 2009, 08:09:47 pm
This reminds me, I need to get off my fat ass and read One Piece. I'm still in the early 300's...


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Chapter 5 is UP!)
Post by: zeldafan42 on 17 October, 2009, 02:05:33 am
OK GUYS!

Chapter 6 is up now! FINALLY!

GO READ IT!!!!!!!!11


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Chapter 6 is UP!)
Post by: Hawk_v3 on 17 October, 2009, 09:05:46 am
>v> *goes to do so*


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Chapter 6 is UP!)
Post by: Hawk_v3 on 17 October, 2009, 09:22:15 am
's good. Maybe you need to lay of the TTGL a bit, though. Way too many references...


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Chapter 6 is UP!)
Post by: Gargravarr on 17 October, 2009, 09:52:15 am
Not bad. I'm guessing the Stone siblings are based on Kittan and his sisters?

And Hawk, the TTGL references will probably die down a bit once they leave Spiral Island.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Chapter 6 is UP!)
Post by: zeldafan42 on 17 October, 2009, 10:11:41 am
Yeah, since Roark's abilities are inspired by TTGL, his story arc is going to be filled with TTGL references.

And since he's named after a Pokemon character, a lot of these characters are going to have Pokemon references as names. >_>
TTGL and Pokemon...apparently, two great tastes that go good together.



Yup! I originally only planned to show Brock, but when typing this chapter, I felt it was going to be a bit short if I only focused on Roark, and also, felt I should update the readers on how the residents of Spiral Island were faring. Then I suddenly had the idea to use this as an excuse to show the rest of the Stone Siblings. ( After all, if you recall, Brock mentioned them in his first appearance. )

Also, I enjoy making fun of Brock/Kittan.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Chapter 6 is UP!)
Post by: I_like_Nonon on 20 October, 2009, 04:42:09 pm
Haven't read it just yet, but I will shortly.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Chapter 6 is UP!)
Post by: Marie Rose on 21 October, 2009, 06:15:00 am
I'll read it when I get back to catching up with the One Piece manga...which will probably be quite a while since I'm in the 300's...


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Chapter 6 is UP!)
Post by: zeldafan42 on 25 March, 2010, 04:42:27 pm
Oh, hey guys. Chapter 7 is up now.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Chapter 6 is UP!)
Post by: Hawk_v3 on 25 March, 2010, 04:46:35 pm
*goes to read*


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Chapter 6 is UP!)
Post by: Gargravarr on 25 March, 2010, 04:50:46 pm
I already read it a while ago and I remember it being good.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Chapter 6 is UP!)
Post by: Hawk_v3 on 25 March, 2010, 04:52:11 pm
Huh. Neat. ^v^ Well done.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Chapter 6 is UP!)
Post by: zeldafan42 on 25 March, 2010, 05:04:50 pm
I had fun writing it. I'm trying hard to improve my skills at writing fight scenes.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Chapter 6 is UP!)
Post by: Gargravarr on 25 March, 2010, 05:08:16 pm
Well you're doing pretty well so far.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Chapter 6 is UP!)
Post by: I_like_Nonon on 25 March, 2010, 07:51:40 pm
Indeed, 'tis pretty good.


Title: Re: One Piece: Adventures of the Seagull Pirates! (Chapter 6 is UP!)
Post by: Marie Rose on 26 March, 2010, 04:48:51 am
I'll read it when I get back to catching up with the One Piece manga...which will probably be quite a while since I'm in the 300's...
I forgot I posted this. I still haven't made it very far since then...