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Title: Another attempt at a story...INFO Topic
Post by: sasori1122 on 03 May, 2009, 01:34:36 pm
I haven't come up with a name for it yet, but I have a general concept for it.

And that is.

The Department of Defense formed a facility to research superhuman prowess, Clifton Laboratories. It was set up in east Atlanta in the 1990's and went underground in 2014, after it became a private institution, separate from the government.  It was formed after the discovery of natural superhuman ability in some individuals, and the government wanted to harness this power.  This institution was originally to research psychic abilities in children, and to try to develop them through training, in both their psychic abilities and combat, creating expert assassins that would be perfect tools of the military.  The research proved to be, largely, a success.  A dozen assassins were trained by the time the lab went into total secrecy 2014, so they were taken by the government and used as weapons.  Over the next few years the military sent them out to eliminate leaders of groups in opposition to the US, or against US interests.  However, some of these assassins sought to quit, and feigned death abroad to come back to the country and live in secrecy.  Seeking answers about their origin, most of those returned to Atlanta, in order to find out the truth.  After uncovering the truth, as well as discovering the new research that had been occurring (human research involving infusing humans with unnatural abilities) and the hundreds of deaths caused by it, the psychics made an attempt to wipe out the facility, as the work done there was inhumane.  Seeing such corruption, most of these decided to take on heroism.  The story takes place in 2024.

So that's just a little bit of backstory, I guess.  I'll put up more stuff about it, including characters and stuff later, and then begin the story itself after I've provided a bit of information...

I'm not really sure how I'm going to write this...I'm always tempted to provide a lot of detail, but I know that if I do that, I won't finish...


Title: Re: Another attempt at a story...INFO Topic
Post by: Hawk_v3 on 03 May, 2009, 06:09:30 pm
Sounds good.


Title: Re: Another attempt at a story...INFO Topic
Post by: sasori1122 on 03 May, 2009, 07:15:50 pm
We'll see where things go...

Anyways

First character to talk about...I have her only sorta planned, so I'm gonna add on to this in a bit, when I think of more information about her

Name: Mirage
Costume: Indigo leather boots, pants, top, and gloves.  Grey cloak that completely obscures her face.
Ability: Telepathy: causing illusions or mirages.
Alignment: Neutral Good (basically, always acts toward the greater good, regardless of the law)
Profile: She typically works throughout the city, but seems to be mostly based in areas in Downtown. She won't go out of her way to work with other heroes.  She tries not to exact too much of a personal sense of justice in order to stay in good standing with local officials, but in order to take out the true menace to society, will she have to break through this barrier?  What will happen if her enemies push her to her limits...?

Secret Identity
Name: Amanda Berch
Appearance: Tall and thin, she has pale, flawless skin, platinum blond hair, and sparkling blue eyes.  She has an impeccable fashion sense.  Overall, her appearance is practically perfect in every way.
Think like a classy and fashionable Gwen Stefani sort of look.
Home: Amanda lives off of a large sum of money obtained through stock investments under the guidance of her friend, Noah.


Ok
(http://i198.photobucket.com/albums/aa110/sasori112289/AmanadaBerch.jpg)
(http://i198.photobucket.com/albums/aa110/sasori112289/AmanadaBerchFace.jpg)

I made he on the sims, but it's kinda hard to make things look just right...plus, the screen capture changed some colors a little bit...the images got darkened


Title: Re: Another attempt at a story...INFO Topic
Post by: sasori1122 on 11 May, 2009, 04:19:05 pm
Name: Xelos
Costume: Similar to Neo's look in the Matrix...
Ability: Very strong telekinesis.  Can move very heavy/large objects, or very small objects.  He can use his mind to level something as big as a building, or manipulate something at the molecular level, however doing so requires a lot of concentration and wears him out.  He can also use his ability to move himself through the air, granting him flight.
Alignment: Chaotic Neutral.  He acts solely out of self interest, whether on the side of good, or the side of evil.
Profile: After leaving the operation, he split from the others, wandering the country.  He shows up in Atlanta from time to time.

Secret Identity
He has none: no need for one.


More about him later, too...


Title: Re: Another attempt at a story...INFO Topic
Post by: sasori1122 on 08 June, 2009, 12:51:45 pm
Background information is tweaked...

will be tweaking these characters shortly and adding more...


Title: Re: Another attempt at a story...INFO Topic
Post by: LuigiKong on 08 June, 2009, 06:31:39 pm
Sounds pretty good


Title: Re: Another attempt at a story...INFO Topic
Post by: sasori1122 on 21 June, 2009, 05:24:16 pm
Name: Noah Lockley
Abilities: Visions of the future of anything he focuses on.
Alignment: Neutral Good
Profile: He isn't fighter, but he was integral in determining the success of potential missions.  As it is, he used his powers to aid himself and his closest friends in making fortunes in the stock market.  Because of this, he has more money than all of the other heroes combined.
Appearance:  He is relatively tall and thin.  He has short brown hair, golden eyes and dresses in the latest fashions.
Home:  He lives in a mansion in Buckhead.


Title: Re: Another attempt at a story...INFO Topic
Post by: Hawk_v3 on 21 June, 2009, 05:26:49 pm
Have you started to write this?


Title: Re: Another attempt at a story...INFO Topic
Post by: sasori1122 on 21 June, 2009, 06:14:34 pm
Have you started to write this?
I haven't thought up all the characters yet...and since they are supposed to already be established and know each other, I thought it would be important to do that first...or at least the important characters, I guess

it would have been easier to do an origin story, probably...


Title: Re: Another attempt at a story...INFO Topic
Post by: Hawk_v3 on 21 June, 2009, 06:15:27 pm
*shrugs* Either way's fine. I just wondered.


Title: Re: Another attempt at a story...INFO Topic
Post by: 5BASS on 31 August, 2009, 02:22:41 pm
...so is this ever going to happen?


Title: Re: Another attempt at a story...INFO Topic
Post by: Hawk_v3 on 31 August, 2009, 02:30:12 pm
Hmm... Bet you 50p it won't.

>v> Nah, I think Sas might be having an uncreative period.