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"I like pie."
>_>
Am I really that hard to write about?
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Re: Comments, Critizisms, and Suggestions for my story....
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Quote from: randomguy44 on 03 September, 2007, 09:42:06 pm
"I like pie."
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Am I really that hard to write about?
oh, come on. You know very well that the segment was purely for comical reasons.
if i want you to fight, I'll be sure to include your knife-wrenches, ok?
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It's about time my favorite story gets updated!
*reads addition*
Uh-oh. I wonder what's going to happen next.
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05 September, 2007, 06:48:03 pm »
I highly appreciate being included in your story, Jawo'. =D
~JudgmentAngel and Adol_the_Red look at each other.
Adol: Uhh, rock-paper-scissors for it?
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Re: Comments, Critizisms, and Suggestions for my story....
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05 September, 2007, 07:02:43 pm »
I have only one suggestion: Somehow put this in the story.....
"*And then *Whoever* made him bite the curb.*
'You murdered them.....YOU KILLED THEM ALL!!' said *Whoever*.
Bad Guy:'Heh....I just wanted some extra cash, that's all.'
**Whoever* lifts his foot*
Bad Guy: 'Wait, don't you want to hear my last words?!'
*Whoever*:".........I just did."
If you can fit that in somewhere, I'm sure it woud help.
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Quote from: Lord Agaranok on 01 September, 2007, 03:04:58 pm
Hey, Jawo. Just to let you know, I've changed into a human-like dark knight instead of a kirby-like form. If it interferes at all with the story, then just keep it in the old way. I'll post a picture of what I look like now soon.
Anyways, it just keeps getting better. I can't wait for the next update.
It won't make a difference...
I portray everyone in a human-like fashion, anyway.
Quote from: Killer_Spatula on 05 September, 2007, 06:48:03 pm
I highly appreciate being included in your story, Jawo'. =D
~JudgmentAngel and Adol_the_Red look at each other.
Adol: Uhh, rock-paper-scissors for it?
XD
Yea, I thought that one was worth chuckling over. ^_^
Quote from: Spring on 05 September, 2007, 07:02:43 pm
I have only one suggestion: Somehow put this in the story.....
"*And then *Whoever* made him bite the curb.*
'You murdered them.....YOU KILLED THEM ALL!!' said *Whoever*.
Bad Guy:'Heh....I just wanted some extra cash, that's all.'
**Whoever* lifts his foot*
Bad Guy: 'Wait, don't you want to hear my last words?!'
*Whoever*:".........I just did."
If you can fit that in somewhere, I'm sure it woud help.
I.....don't think that will work.... >_>
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>=O!
I look lame... and helpless =(
Oh well.
I lol'd after I said something then it was like
Snaketheserpet: <Is knocked out>
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Quote from: Jawo' on 12 September, 2007, 10:10:46 am
Quote from: Lord Agaranok on 01 September, 2007, 03:04:58 pm
Hey, Jawo. Just to let you know, I've changed into a human-like dark knight instead of a kirby-like form. If it interferes at all with the story, then just keep it in the old way. I'll post a picture of what I look like now soon.
Anyways, it just keeps getting better. I can't wait for the next update.
It won't make a difference...
I portray everyone in a human-like fashion, anyway.
Quote from: Killer_Spatula on 05 September, 2007, 06:48:03 pm
I highly appreciate being included in your story, Jawo'. =D
~JudgmentAngel and Adol_the_Red look at each other.
Adol: Uhh, rock-paper-scissors for it?
XD
Yea, I thought that one was worth chuckling over. ^_^
Quote from: Spring on 05 September, 2007, 07:02:43 pm
I have only one suggestion: Somehow put this in the story.....
"*And then *Whoever* made him bite the curb.*
'You murdered them.....YOU KILLED THEM ALL!!' said *Whoever*.
Bad Guy:'Heh....I just wanted some extra cash, that's all.'
**Whoever* lifts his foot*
Bad Guy: 'Wait, don't you want to hear my last words?!'
*Whoever*:".........I just did."
If you can fit that in somewhere, I'm sure it woud help.
I.....don't think that will work.... >_>
You're right, it would
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Finish your work! I wanna find out the plan!
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Re: Comments, Critizisms, and Suggestions for my story....
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sorry, it's just so damn hard to get my idea on paper...
I added another segment to the chapter at least....
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Yeah, It can be difficult...
Anyway, someone's gonna end up with a lotta bullets.
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Stop riding my crotch, please. I don't even know who you are.
wat why are my fruit fighting i dont even get back in the fridge or meet a blendery death
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I still love this story! MOAR NAO! (just don't hurt yourself).
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...Awesome, yet again.
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Stop riding my crotch, please. I don't even know who you are.
wat why are my fruit fighting i dont even get back in the fridge or meet a blendery death
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Lawl, Sasori's a gangster.
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I forgot about this, I need to start reading it again.
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