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« Reply #120 on: 27 October, 2007, 11:19:52 am »

Excellent  Tongue b Man, I haven't commented in a long time
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« Reply #121 on: 08 November, 2007, 04:47:18 pm »

Small update?
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« Reply #122 on: 08 November, 2007, 04:48:17 pm »

Small update?

Very. Basically I just cleaned up some stuff in the chapter and the previous.
I an working on the next one finally though. I figure it's high damn time, huh?
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« Reply #123 on: 08 November, 2007, 10:02:50 pm »

Sure is.  Tongue
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Stop riding my crotch, please. I don't even know who you are.


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« Reply #124 on: 07 January, 2008, 10:25:56 am »

Added 6 lines to the story. Tongue


Sorry for teasing >_<
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« Reply #125 on: 07 January, 2008, 10:28:05 am »

Ah, It's ok. You don't get paid for this, and you probably don't have a lot of time to work on it.
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« Reply #126 on: 07 January, 2008, 10:29:45 am »

True.
I'm finally off work for a couple days, and I've been wanting to update a bunch of stuff.
After I finally added info to my Lounge Bio *hint hint* I did a quick type here.
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« Reply #127 on: 08 January, 2008, 09:41:33 am »

A few more lines added.

Some deep sh** up in here now...
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« Reply #128 on: 08 January, 2008, 12:34:41 pm »

Hmm? You updated?
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« Reply #129 on: 08 January, 2008, 12:39:22 pm »

Hmm? You updated?

days off of work make me do crazy stuff....
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« Reply #130 on: 08 January, 2008, 12:40:57 pm »

Ahh, still working huh? Where do you work anyway?
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« Reply #131 on: 08 January, 2008, 12:41:46 pm »

Ahh, still working huh? Where do you work anyway?

a local Wal-Mart on overnights.
and I intend to STILL work for quite a while, thank you... >_>
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« Reply #132 on: 08 January, 2008, 12:45:37 pm »

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« Reply #133 on: 08 January, 2008, 03:54:52 pm »

hopefully you aren't seeking long term employment at Wal-Mart
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« Reply #134 on: 09 January, 2008, 12:24:31 am »

hopefully you aren't seeking long term employment at Wal-Mart

....and why not?
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