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Jawooooooooooo
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« Reply #92 on: 25 November, 2009, 03:57:18 am » |
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I lol'd. Also, good job with the eye. |
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Esh
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« Reply #93 on: 25 November, 2009, 06:56:43 am » |
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With wit like that you'd fit into me and my friends conversations so well.... |
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Gaffit
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« Reply #95 on: 01 December, 2009, 04:32:40 pm » |
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I finally remembered to breath again halfway through...
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Fuuka Yamagishi
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« Reply #97 on: 03 December, 2009, 01:33:36 am » |
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wow, that was epic...
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This is an intense, heart pounding adventure! | Internet Antagonist, Prince Silly, The Bazle Stop riding my crotch, please. I don't even know who you are.   wat why are my fruit fighting i dont even get back in the fridge or meet a blendery death - TML |
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Jawooooooooooo
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« Reply #99 on: 01 April, 2010, 11:14:10 am » |
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Wow, dude. That's more than impressive.
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IngSlayer
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This has caught my interest, story-wise. Also, I really liked the metal manipulation in panels 4 and 5 on page 14 and the shines on page 15.
A couple minor things I want to point out:
Page 3: "Manageable" is spelled wrong.
Page 4: Panel 5, wtf at the dialogue placement
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ShinobiNinjaX
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Dang, must have missed that word during spell check.
That page was a January 09 page. When the dialogue was revised, there wasn't enough space to write what needed to be said. >.>
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SHINOBY'S STILL ALIVE!  Anyway, this is seriously badass. Only complaint is page 4, you should consider splitting it into two pages so the reader doesn't get scared off by the amount of dialogue on one page. |
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ShinobiNinjaX
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lulz, yes I am.
I guess I should have split that page in 2...
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