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My story!...I'm still thinking of a title!

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« on: 13 August, 2007, 06:33:31 pm »

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        Jeremiah sat down on his bed, and sighed as he put his head down. It had been quite a day's work; farming wasn't the easiest job. He ran his hand through his dark brown hair, thinking about what was going to happen as time passed...In just years, he would be off on his own...
        He blinked his brown eyes. The thought stung. He had to leave his father...whom he had grown so close to...the memories of the 14 previous years rushed through his mind like a freight train. As a 6 year old, viewing his mother, who had been attacked by one of the brutal, wild groups of creatures that lived in the nearby forest, her being one of their 17 victims of the quiet town of Setharim.
        Setharim's name came about when one outcast from a somewhat unknown group came and started the small villiage, with a few friends. The friendly villiage had a wonderful look at the natural surroundings, with mountains nearby, and a forest surrounding. The mountains Seth dubbed "The Rim." And so, Setharim was born.
        However, in the nearby forest lived various groups of creatures unknown to man before the creation of Setharim, which withstood many attacks after the creatures noticed their territory being taken over.
        The 6 year old Jeremiah witnessed the first attack in 9 years, and never saw another during the next 8 years. Yet he learned sword and bow from his father. He also learned it from another man in the villiage, who was rather expierenced in the art. The man went by the name Harim, and had lived there for longer Jeremiah could remember. The man mainly taught younger ones how to fight in case of an attack, always seeming to look for something. His eyes always seemed to brighten when Jeremiah defeated one of Harim's pupils, as was the usual.
        Jeremiah slowly shifted back to the present time. He wondered how much longer it would be before he left his father, who had cared so well for him. He thought this among other things as he lay his head to sleep...
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« Reply #1 on: 13 August, 2007, 09:15:19 pm »

Hmmm...so this is a midevil story. good so far.
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I'd really appreciate an apple about now...
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« Reply #2 on: 14 August, 2007, 09:15:39 am »

Thanks.
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« Reply #3 on: 14 August, 2007, 05:29:04 pm »

Moar feedback? :3
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« Reply #4 on: 14 August, 2007, 06:19:34 pm »

Moar Story! >8U
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« Reply #5 on: 14 August, 2007, 07:21:41 pm »

Moar Story! >8U
Maybe tonight or tomorrow....
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« Reply #6 on: 14 August, 2007, 08:12:45 pm »

I wrote it and deleted it. Sorry. XD
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« Reply #7 on: 14 August, 2007, 10:05:41 pm »

sounds a lot like M. Night's The Village.
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« Reply #8 on: 30 August, 2007, 10:27:05 am »

I'm sorry I haven't updated, I've been doing other things. I will some other time.
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